Exercise 5.10 Writing News Stories 4
Early Sunday morning three students from the Alpha Beta Zeta fraternity were admitted to a local hospital allegedly due to alcohol poisoning, according to Jan Mize of University’s public relations.
Mize said that Press Martin, of Shethar, NH, Al Amalek, of Nashville, TN and local resident Rob Smith were diagnosed as having alcohol poisoning after having been at a party at the ABZ house Saturday evening. While Martin and Smith were released from the hospital Monday morning, Amalek still remains and is listed in critical condition.
In a statement from the university, the ABZ fraternity is being suspended as well as all of its activities on campus. At this time, the length of the suspension has not been determined.
The suspension is based on University president Harvey Smithville’s restating of a policy banning alcohol from fraternity houses located on campus property or within campus environments two weeks ago.
According to Smithville, “Any fraternity in which the members have alcohol will be immediately suspended. A second offense within a year will result in the banning of that fraternity for five years.”
“We wholeheartedly agree with President Smithville that alcohol has no place at fraternity parties,” said Bart Addison, Interfraternity Council president in response. “I believed that everyone was adhering to the university’s policy. However, I do not believe that the entire fraternity should be held responsible for the actions of a few.”
At this time, Addison plans to ask Smithville to reconsider his suspension of the ABZs.
February 26th, 2010 at 10:34 am
1. Good lead. But (despite the confusing nature of the notes) I think you can confirm that they were admitted for alcohol poisoning — that comes from the hospital, not university.
2. I don’t think Smithville’s quote accomplishes that much. Could be paraphrased.
3. Addison’s two separate statements should not be combined into one.